Orlijah month: Drabble
Jan. 2nd, 2008 12:12 pm![[personal profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/user.png){kind=small}
lijahloverPure Love
Orlijah
Word Count:100
Warnings:sex
This is not true it never happened.
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The cotton sheets are cool on their hot, sweaty skin. The air in the room makes it hard to breathe. The bodies of the couple are pressing together, tightly. They kiss and caress every inch of their burning skin.
"I love you so much," rasps Orlando as he sucks on Elijah's pebbled nipples.
"I love you too Orli," pants Elijah as he pulls on Orlando's hair. "I need more please," begs Elijah.
Orlando gives him what he wants by moving further down his body, devouring him inch by inch. He takes him in his mouth, and deep throats him.
Elijah screams.
End
Orlijah
Word Count:100
Warnings:sex
This is not true it never happened.
Betaed by the wonderful
mews1945:Thanks!The cotton sheets are cool on their hot, sweaty skin. The air in the room makes it hard to breathe. The bodies of the couple are pressing together, tightly. They kiss and caress every inch of their burning skin.
"I love you so much," rasps Orlando as he sucks on Elijah's pebbled nipples.
"I love you too Orli," pants Elijah as he pulls on Orlando's hair. "I need more please," begs Elijah.
Orlando gives him what he wants by moving further down his body, devouring him inch by inch. He takes him in his mouth, and deep throats him.
Elijah screams.
End
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Date: 2008-01-02 07:10 pm (UTC)(no subject)
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Date: 2008-01-02 10:07 pm (UTC)That last line made me smile. A lot.
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Date: 2008-01-02 10:16 pm (UTC)(no subject)
Date: 2008-01-03 12:02 am (UTC)The only suggestion I have is to change the verb tense in these sentences:
The cotton sheets
were(are) cool on their hot, sweaty skin. The air in the roommade(makes) it hard to breathe. The bodies of the couplewere(are) pressed together, tightly.Oh, and did you post it to
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